[x]

deviantART

 


                       This is where
they come to retire, to find
waterfront nursing homes
so they can settle for death
and bingo. They’ll spend the
next five to ten years roaming
golf courses like the sheep that
are our agriculturally rich past,
laying down after a nice hearty
dinner of chicken and tapioca,
adorned with hospital bracelets
the color of the Atlantic (were
the waves to be stilled and the
ocean life eradicated) and watch
the setting sun behind a silhouette
of paper mills.  
                   We take the bus
past palm trees and neon
bridges, abandoned buildings
and fast food restaurants,
talking about leaving for cities
of the same, if not better, stature.
They say this state is majestic
enough to be content with for
life. They say that somehow
you’ll always wind up here again.
Somewhere we know this to be
true, but we also know that as
beautiful as this place may be,

Heaven is for those that are dead.
©2008-2009 ~EtherealJade
Details
Submitted: May 1, 2008
File Size: 1.4 KB
Image Size: 0 bytes
Resolution: 0×0
Comments: 13
Favourites & Collections: 4 [who?]

Views
Total: 169
Today: 0

Downloads
Total: 4
Today: 0

Thumb

Author's Comments

O Florida, how lovely art thou...

This is the updated version
[x]

Devious Comments

love 1 1 joy 0 0 wow 0 0 mad 0 0 sad 0 0 fear 0 0 neutral 0 0

Comments


I IS MAD IN LOVE WITH YOU FOR THIS!!! That last line is so much great!

--
"Ignorance is bliss, my friend. Don't burden yourself with the secrets of scary people."
Oh mah jeezus, you put it in your signature, you crazy person. You're insane.

--
War as we knew it was obsolete
Nothing could beat complete denial
:D I may be, but it's that good!

--
"Ignorance is bliss, my friend. Don't burden yourself with the secrets of scary people."
Wow. @_@ Uh, love that title, first of all.

And as a fellow writer who is obligated to give you constructive critique, I will tell you that it NEEDS MORE COWBELL.

--
I currently have 351 points of faith in humanity.

~

According to Sweeney Todd, those who fall for dark and vengeful types will eventually be cast into the flame where they once roasted their fellow man. Go for the cute stupid guys. :salute:
Haha well I have an updated draft I need to get on here, we'll see if it meets your cowbell standards, eh? :D

--
War as we knew it was obsolete
Nothing could beat complete denial
:XD: Yes, we shall.

(Finished Into the Wild, by the way. :nod:)

--
I currently have 351 points of faith in humanity.

~

According to Sweeney Todd, those who fall for dark and vengeful types will eventually be cast into the flame where they once roasted their fellow man. Go for the cute stupid guys. :salute:
Oh, did you like it?

--
War as we knew it was obsolete
Nothing could beat complete denial
Uh-huh. ^^ I was bummed by the time I finished it, of course, but Jon Krakauer is the master. :ninja:

--
I currently have 351 points of faith in humanity.

~

According to Sweeney Todd, those who fall for dark and vengeful types will eventually be cast into the flame where they once roasted their fellow man. Go for the cute stupid guys. :salute:
Haha now you have to see the movie and glorify Emile Hirsch's beauty.

--
War as we knew it was obsolete
Nothing could beat complete denial

Site Map